Do you agree or disagree When people succeed it is entirely because of hard work Luck has nothing to do with their success

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Do you agree or disagree? When people succeed it is entirely because of hard work.Luck has nothing to do with their success.

Many people succeed in life, and we keep on puzzling over how they were able to make it.I personally believe that success comes with tremendous hard work.I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in my body paragraphs.

To start with, success comes with a lot of perseverance and hardwork and gradually it becomes crowned with victory.My husband’s experience is an intelligent example of this.While he was pursuing his PhD at the university of idaho he got to found out that before he can be awarded the degree he needs to fulfill the departmental requirement,which is about passing the preliminary examination.From his reviews, only 10 percent do pass.So this challenged him and he started preparing from the beginning of the year.In Fact,he spent over twelve hours everyday studying.At that time, majority of his friend are gallivanting.Infact, one even confronted him that know matter how much time he devote for the course he won’t pass.But my husbands tenacity keeps him going and eventually he was among the people that ace the exam.If he had listen to his classmates, he wouldn’t have passed.

Furthermore, success comes with careful planning and determination.Some people attributed my husbands victory as luck, but I can tell you he planned a lot because he had a daily time table, which included hours to complete different task.In fact, he only slept for five hours while he was preparing.All this actually made him to attain a greater feat.If he had not planned well he might not have attain the victory.

In light of the reasons mentioned, I believe that success comes with a myriad of hard work.This is because it requires consistent hard work, and because it involves a lot of determination and planning.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, so, well, while, i feel, in fact, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07986111111 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08830110002 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614583333333 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 20.1344086022 358% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 275.114975965 48.9658058833 562% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 365.75 100.406767564 364% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.0 20.6045352989 349% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.75 5.45110844103 362% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.5376344086 560% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151902068848 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122671889584 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645365184426 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122671889584 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645365184426 0.0645574589148 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 38.5 11.7677419355 327% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.6 58.1214874552 -3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 10.1575268817 309% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.37 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.37 8.01818996416 142% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.8 10.0537634409 306% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.247311828 303% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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