Do you agree or disagree?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
There is no doubt that nowadays, jobs play the key role in people's lives. No one can deny the effects /influence of unemployment on our private/ daily lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is what kind of job we should look for. Some people may hold this viewpoint that it is better to have a secure job whenever we could. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that we should be patient and search as much as we can in order to find a job which is more satisfying. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that nowadays unemployment is increasing in all countries. An empirical study in the Asia shows that the majority of eastern countries are suffering from unemployment. This means that in near future it would be so difficult to find a job, as there are so many unemployed youths. This clarifies the fact that we should be more careful about maintaining our job and try to get a secure job which guarantees our future.
Another equally important reason is that from a psychological standpoint, when people lose their job, they become anxious and life tension overwhelms them. In this situation, people take some unexpected actions like stealing, committing a crime or even committing a suicide. In fact, the increase in the rate of unemployment can have deteriorating effects on society, which leads to reduction of life quality. In such a situation, it is really essential to have a secure job which we can rely on.
The last but not the least reason is that although we may not love secure jobs, they can warranty a high quality of life for us. In a modern life, we do not need to be satisfied with our jobs and love them, we just need to do them in a way that we enjoy them. For example, an office employee may not like his job but he can do his job in a more exciting manner like listening to music while he is working, so he would enjoy what he does. This means that nowadays all kinds of jobs can become satisfying and that is why it would be more logical to choose the secure jobs among them.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that a secure job can guarantee our future and also helps us avoid taking wrong actions like committing crimes. It is obvious that even secure jobs can be satisfying just by doing them with more fun. All in all, it is anticipated that in future people will be take secure jobs right away rather than wait for a satisfying job
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ich leads to reduction of life quality. In such a situation, it is really essentia...
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...It is obvious that even secure jobs can be satisfying just by doing them with more fun. All i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, really, regarding, so, while, for example, in fact, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47323340471 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54453520864 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475374732334 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6777402943 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9545454545 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2272727273 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04545454545 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387424009978 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114638739936 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105671862656 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232170594488 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924656064738 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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