do you agree or disagree?Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
The question is whether technology has caused children to adapt ordinary thoughts or not. Everyone in consideration to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this statement; however, I am inclined to concur with such a frustrating circumstance. I believe that nowadays children are at the same rate of intelligence compared with the past but technology prevents them from achieving breakthrough. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point:
To begin with, one should notice that now populations have been decreased and every family has one or two kids; hence, parents can dedicate much more money for their young to provide a wide range of electronic devises for them; therefore, a variety of up-dated apparatuses will be available. This generation does not need to work part-time unlike the past. It goes without saying that the overwhelming majority of children were experiencing different types of jobs beside their school's life; consequently, their mind was ready and creative for doing anything. Nevertheless, today's families do not allow their beasts to work at the same time with their college due to improving the life conditions, so they have to stay at home and manipulate their smartphones.
The second reason for my argument lies in the fact that the psychologists have convinced parents that playing in out can be danger for children, so this little generation has abused from this situation and have been addict to technology. In the past period, the young were spending much time in out with their friends, meanwhile their curiosity were steering them to explore new things or at least imitate points which were being shown by the TV. For instance, once I and my brother tried to make a huge paper airplane. It is true, that dream could never become to the reality; however, our endeavor was worthwhile. Nowadays, children expect from companies or other people to provide more facilities and welfare for them instead of showing any efforts because technology has removed all of their needs
As I have illustrated, I strongly believe that technology plays a crucial role in children's life and since they can simulate all their imaginations in such cyber world; as a result, creativity feeling will be reduced among children.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, while, at least, for instance, i feel, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12303664921 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78559740773 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607329842932 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.436000314 48.9658058833 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.083333333 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.75 5.45110844103 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152552847527 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595485226999 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532306075045 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105126692246 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247483708238 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 11.7677419355 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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