doing one thing at the time or many things
Living at the start of the new millennium, in the most advanced technological era in history, one is confronted with a plethora of knowledge and information which itself continues to become outdated at the moment. In this high competitive modern world, people should be paying more close attention to their works and their products; and this thing required doing your parts in life patiently. If I were up to choose doing one thing or multi things, I would to choose making one proper thing.
First of all, the competition, one of the most aspects of new world is how to make your work in perfect way. People nowadays have all the technology and the materials to come up with something brilliant and special. However, when individuals trying to make many things at the same time might be they get confused and lost their focus. As a result, they end up with inconvenient enterprises. Therefore, the most reliable way to get closes to success by concentrating on one thing and makes it well. For example, two years ago, I was working at big computer company, as a computer programmer; the salary at this company was high and dream of everyone. Unfortunately, my boss asked me to programming the computers at two sub-branches of their company, I was in rush, so I decided to do both work at the same time, due to that, did a big mistake cost me lost my job. Then, one week later, the company found another employee can do my work. As we have seen, people should to their work in right way or they will be faced being laid out.
Besides the high competitive, people should do one thing at the main time, since making many things can increase the stress and depression. As everyone knows, depression is the main cause of much medical illness; like hypertension, cardiac diseases and more. Although many people argue that people should be fast and quick when it comes to their work. But, that required the one to be less efficiency and productivity. Let’s take my mother experience as an example for that. After my father death, my mother took the full responsibility of the house; her responsibilities include: taking care of us financially and personally. My mother has two jobs, one as a full time job during the day, and as a journalist publishing articles on online magazine. On top of that, she is taking care of us. As a result, she is suffering quite deal. Consequently, my mother recently diagnosed with hypertension. If my mother had not worked and taken all these responsibilities all in one, she would never have such a health problem.
In conclusion, while there are some benefits of doing many things at a time, but the disadvantages far outweighing the advantages? People who choose doing the work one by one, can get more reliable results, and they can lives healthy happy lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 417, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to do'.
Suggestion: to do
... life patiently. If I were up to choose doing one thing or multi things, I would to c...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 468, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to make'.
Suggestion: to make
...hing or multi things, I would to choose making one proper thing. First of all, the c...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...nally. My mother has two jobs, one as a full time job during the day, and as a journalist...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to do'.
Suggestion: to do
...ghing the advantages? People who choose doing the work one by one, can get more relia...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 220, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'live'
Suggestion: live
...get more reliable results, and they can lives healthy happy lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73360655738 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8025805621 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534836065574 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8231382601 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.52 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396533944489 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108005255246 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139542342026 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29812143413 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638109175868 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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