Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games and social networking websites.
In modern sophisticated world, the importance of following the education specially for the youth has become a controversial issue. A multitude of people are of the opinion that the education at contemporary time has become arduous compared to previous generation because of the arrival of cutting-edge technology, others hold opposite side, stating development of technology has a positive impact on students’ educations. The question is whether the advancement of the mass media, social media, and games has negative effect on pupils’ education or not. I profoundly subscribe to this consensus that claims students’ education has become demanding nowadays. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the ensuing essay.
To begin with, utilizing cell phones and a wide range of games disturb students’ concentrations. Playing games motivates students to spend a lot of time on their phone or their laptop, which reduce the time they can spend on their studying. Moreover, even usage of their cell phones and all electronical devices for studying might distract their attention. My personal experience demonstrates a compelling reason of this. When I was at high school, I was playing a game named ’The Sims’ on my laptop. Whenever I intended to work on my high school project on my laptop, instead of focusing on preparing my Power Point, I played that game. Eventually, I got a low score and failed that exam, for having a game that I installed on my laptop for my recreation. Had not have that game on my laptop, I would have not been distracted.
Another reason worth mentioning is that an innate desire for socializing encourages students to use their social media and their cell phones for interaction with others. The paramount importance of usage of social media and new sites for being in contact with others provokes students to use their cell phone meanwhile they are studying. Every time students check their phone to answer their calls and messages, they do not give up and continue talking with others. For instance, a friend of mine who was in elementary school was addicted to checking her cell phone every twenty seconds. As time went by she lost her control on spend hours on her phone, which brought her series of problem at school, since she could not live without her phone, and we were not allowed to use our phone at school. As a result, Individuals tendency to fulfill their desire of socializing might cause students to use their devices and lose their time for studying.
All in all, distraction that is caused by using devices and humans’ desires for interaction are the reasons that make it a tall task for students to focus on their education at the current era.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 766, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...on my laptop for my recreation. Had not have that game on my laptop, I would have no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, second, so, while, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0043956044 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77420624022 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512087912088 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1775813928 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.85 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130318207507 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456700354814 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338807534129 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808288160863 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225425804279 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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