Essay topics: TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
People nowadays are working alot and spending more time with their work instead of their children. therefore children have time enough to play games and sports or do schoolwork. I firmly believe that in this situation children must study harder and do their homework more rather than playing on accounts of many reasons.
To begin with, because parents do not spend time with their children, the children must do their work themselves and parents have not enough time to support them. When the parents spend more time with children, the parents teach the children lessons related to schoolwork, help them to do homework assignments and then the children's learning process will be complete. therefore in their leisure time, the children can have fun and play games or sports. On the other hand, if the parents are not at home to support their children, they must do all of these tasks alone. therefore, this is reasonable that children must spend more time to learn to do their best in school.
Secondly, the more knowledge children gain in their childhood, the more job opportunity in the future. children whose parents are so busy have more time to learn and study themselves. For this reason they should enjoy this time properly to advance their job in comparison with others. By doing so, they guarantee to have more job opportunities and better jobs in the future. Finally, due to this knowledge which they obtained in their childhood they will have more salary and better quality of life in adult.
In summary, I personally believe that, children who have less support from their parents because of being busy, must use their time intensively to be more educated. they must study harder because their parents do not have enough time to teach them. Additionally, by studying hard they will have better life in near future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Suggestion: therefore,
...h their work instead of their children. therefore children have time enough to play games...
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Suggestion: Therefore
...rens learning process will be complete. therefore in their leisure time, the children can...
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Suggestion: therefore,
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Suggestion: Children
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Suggestion:
... to learn and study themselves. For this reason they should enjoy this time prope...
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...od they will have more salary and better quality of life in adult. In summary, I...
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Suggestion: They
...r time intensively to be more educated. they must study harder because their parents...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in summary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92233009709 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39814341528 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456310679612 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 457.2 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6006745156 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0625 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391803699071 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164295013062 0.076458572812 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876827673801 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265282837585 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847370881785 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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