Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, we are in a communications era which vast amounts of information every second is transferring from everywhere to all around the world. Without any doubt, in this time many events are occurring around the world. With this in mind, the question arises whether we must know about every news and event even it will not affect our life or not. We know that there are lots of events in various kinds in the world and these do not stop never so that it is impossible to follow these events. I firmly believe that it does not make sense to know about all events happening around the world on accounts of many reasons.
To begin with, time is one of the most critical factors that should be considered in this situation. People have many things to do in their life like, doing their job, spending time with family, etc. Therefore they should allocate their time to certain kinds of work which benefit them and affect their daily life, not the ones which waste their time. Getting information from all around the world not only is not necessary for daily life but also by doing so, people lost their valuable time. For example, if you live in America, and one day a president of Yemen changes, this change will not affect your life at all. So that knowing about that event does not influence your life.
The second reason relates to the humans' brain capacity. We know that everyone can learn and remember a specific amount of information in his or her brain. Therefore it is impossible to follow every event in the world and remember it. For an illustration, suppose a person who wants to know about all the news all around the world every day. This person must spend lots of energy in daily life to gather information and events around the world, reads and listens to them, understands them, and then try to store them in his or her brain. This person, without any doubt, could not do this work very well.
In conclusion, nowadays all around the world, many events occurs in every second, but we can not follow all of them, especially events which are not related to our daily life. Thus, I suggest everyone getting information about events that affect their lives directly. By doing so, they will save time and storage of their memory for other important things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60344827586 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23457121179 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458128078818 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1989528652 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.45 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317059693727 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106442551693 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556718185605 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208432503701 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349695314463 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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