The extended family is less important now than in the past.
If we see and analyse the size of family since last 20 years, we can see huge negative slope in the size of the family. These days most of the family consists of mainly father, mother and their one or two children. However, I strongly disagree with this changes in family system as well as with the statement that nuclear family is more important these days than joint family. In order to support my argument, I would like to discuss on three aspects of joint family focused on raising of children, security and health benefits.
First, the mixture of generation of people right from grandparents, parents, cousins, uncle and others, create a quite unique environment in present world where most people are living in small flat with just three family members. These kind of environment is quite beneficial for children who are of learning age, as they can learn many things from their family environment. Further, right from the begining they understand how to be social, they can regard different viewpoints of many people, as well as they learn many life ethics and manner from quite elder person. For example, if we see the raising of children in Canada and Nepal, we can find quite huge difference with their social behaviour and ethics. In Nepal still many family are joint family and children develop in presence of large amount of members and they adapt likewise to be indulge in social life. However, the small family limits the social environment for children developing in Canada.
Second, another benefits of joint family is the security and safety around the large family. For instance, lets take a example of a labour lives in a joint family and he has to perform some late night work in his work place, in this sort of situation, it will be quite easy for him to leave his children at home as their will be someone like grandparents to take care of children. So, in the present world which run behind economy and demand huge amount of time in workplace, the worker will feel secure and comfortable in their work if they are living in joint family. Further, joint family also has some financial security. In most of the joint family, the financial burden of the family is always shared among the family members which make it quite easy for all the family members to live, as quite small contirbution from every members can collect huge amount of money.
Even though, there are many benefits from the joint family, there can be some minor problems in the joint family. As we can consider there is mixture of people under one roof, there will also be mixture of perception. Conseqently, the perception mixture can often result misunderstanding and quarrelsome environment. However, these kind of environment is also present under nuclear family. So, every family need some sort of compromises and understanding to be happy, considering all those merits and demerits I belive joint family has more benefits than harm.
Therefore, these three aspects show the importance of joint family over small one in present economy focused, fast moving world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, second, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2560.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91362763916 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47135213794 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445297504798 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0604111066 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.904761905 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8095238095 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133625629095 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510522451073 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049739401588 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931140836036 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362274340023 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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