Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
A hectic lifestyle that causes stress plays a major role in responding to all the diseases whether it is diabetes, unhappiness, or brain stroke. Therefore, it is important for people to use part of their time for their own to improve their mental health. Personally, I believe that famous people deserve more privacy. I feel this way for two main reasons. Which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, privacy is a crucial element of mental health. The lack of that can cause problems for the mental health of a person. When people are alone or with their family, they can express their feeling easily without hesitation or fear of being judge. But, if you do not relief yourself it is possible for you to breakdown mentally. Celebrities do not have enough privacy. Consequently, they always worry about being watched by people or media. So, they cannot express their feelings like anger or sadness. Due to, their reputation everything goes on media. As a result, it can cause a negative effect on their mental health and destroy their entire life. For instance, Bobby Fischer, the greatest chess player all the time when he became popular among people. Media at any time or in any situation published his photos. After a few months, he could not handle it. Therefore, he abandoned chess and went to an island to live alone.
Secondly, famous people want to do normal stuff. For example, they want to go to a restaurant, going for a walk with their dog, and go to the gym. However, in reality, it does not happen. Because people love them. They want to take pictures with them or have their signature. Due to the previous fact, every normal things become problematic for them. Therefore, they cannot enjoy their life. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. About ten years ago, my brother started his career as an actor. After a few movies which he had a roll on them, he became famous and everybody knew him. Every time we went to the restaurant with my brother peoples came and asked questions or took selfies. Because of that, we could not eat our food. That experience was really awful.
In conclusion, famous people need more privacy. This because when you do not have time for your own it causes problems for your mental health, and they need fun in their life and need some time to spend in public places.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
.... I feel this way for two main reasons. Which I will explore in the following essay. ...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...owever, in reality, it does not happen. Because people love them. They want to take pic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70217917676 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41737452977 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53995157385 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9276135161 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.8484848485 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.5151515152 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.51515151515 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118511232308 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327909609732 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05235533088 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082749895918 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261634667186 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.09 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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