In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

Increasing life expectancy is a new phenomenon that can be found around the world. Political stability, better economical status dan advancement in medicine contributed to this trend. There are several advatages from this old and very old community, for example, improvement in quality of life, prevention of population boom and increasing number of middle class and rich people. Longer life expectancy may attribute to numerous reasons. I would like to explain several of it.

There is shifting in mortality cause, either in development countries or third world countries, from infectious disease to degenerative one. Unlike death due to infection, degenerative one doesn’t kill patient immediately. They will decreas health status of the person in timely manner, thus give patients several years longer.

Improvement in health facility, technology, drugs and emergency procedure help prevent patient death. For instances, the invention of antibiotics, eliminates mortality cause by infection. In addition, modernized health facility could be found anywhere in the world. From rural area to big city, these hospitals facilitated people to get a high quality health service include in emergency department. Live saving procedures prove able to prevent mortality of an accident victim or a critical patients.

The phenomenon also happened because of increase health awareness in community. With development of communication and information technology, information tranfer become so efficient and apparent more than ever. Everyone knows that prevention are better than curative treatment so they exersice more, do healthy diet and stop smoking. It all thanks to spread of information by internet and advertisement.

With this improvement in all health sectors, increase health awareness and innovation of communication and information technology, life expectancy is longer than ever. Eventhough it produce new complication, like increasing medicine cost and lower number of productive worker, this phenomenon still become sign of a better life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, third, thus, for example, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.88 4.8611393121 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09491338956 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613333333333 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.899757528 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8421052632 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7894736842 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100431964877 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0287252908136 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212934267277 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0537641095586 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172901098147 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.87 58.1214874552 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.53 10.9000537634 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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