A gift such as a camera a soccer ball or an animal can contribute to a child s development What gift would you give to help a child develop Why Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice

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"A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice."

Some gifts have an impact on kids' development. If I had to give a child a gift, I would give an animal such as a dog or cat. Some children love playing with animals, and also animals keep them company. Consequently, children would learn compassion, empathy, and other virtues from animals.

To begin with, animals play an important role in the lives of those who own them because they bring joy when their owners are sad. Moreover, pets can contribute positively to the development of a child. For instance, positive relationships with pets can help children develop trustworthiness in relationships with others. Having a pet can teach children responsibilities and promote empathy, and also the capacity of caring for another life. The company of pets has been helpful in the lives of children because it keeps them more active than those who do not own a pet. Therefore, researchers have found enough evidence to prove that having a pet helps people to reduce levels of stress, and lower their heart rate. Not to mention, If a child developed a good connection with their pet, it would mean that the child would grow in an environment full of love, compassion, and harmony.

On the other hand, giving a camera or a soccer ball to a child might sound like a good idea. A camera can allow a child to capture any moment with just a simple click, but can take away from the present moment. Meanwhile, children with a pet can create lifelong memories as well as many other countless experiences. In contrast, cameras are not able to capture these types of moments in life because living the moment is more than just a picture. Furthermore, when kids receive a gift like a soccer ball, they might play for a few moments, then they would forget it. Perhaps, they could play with the ball when they are bored or when they feel alone which can make them feel more lonely because they won't have a partner to play with. On the contrary, pets, such as cats and dogs come looking for their owners, moving their tails, licking their faces, encouraging them to play and making them feel love and special.

In conclusion, animals are the best gift a child could receive in order to contribute in their development. Owning an animal creates longlife memories, and teaches new virtues from animals which a camera or a soccer ball cannot provide.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61519607843 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45215535562 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46568627451 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 408.0 20.1344086022 2026% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1883.0 100.406767564 1875% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 408.0 20.6045352989 1980% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 204.0 5.45110844103 3742% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282609527373 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.282609527373 0.076458572812 370% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217883678275 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691345904223 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 204.3 11.7677419355 1736% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -334.18 58.1214874552 -575% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 161.2 10.1575268817 1587% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.0 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.27 8.01818996416 328% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.002688172 580% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 165.2 10.0537634409 1643% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 58.0 10.247311828 566% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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