The government want to improve education levels. Which of the following do you think is the best way?
1. hire more teachers to teach in a small class
2. preschool education before kindergarten
3. to provide some training courses so that teachers can be more professional
Since the dawn of civilization and industrialization, the outstanding role of education in every individual’s life has been undeniable. Regarding the importance of the issue, a wide variety of aspect of education have been assessed by scholars for decades. Accordingly, an undeniable question that always has been the topic of controversy and brought about debates is what the best method is that a government can apply in order to develop education levels. I adhere to the idea that hiring more teachers to teach in small classes is the most effective method. In what follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my viewpoint.
The first remarkable aspect to point out is that enabling teachers to spend more time on guiding each student is of the main advantages of such a policy. It is crystal clear that teachers can not dedicate adequate time and energy to each student, if classes are overcrowded, and in the best case, they will be only able to teach some materials without fucusing on details or answering students’ questions. Therefore, many vague angles and dimansions of every lecture remain that do not allow students to understand and apply lessons deeply. Furthermore, the less stress-out teachers are due to the less amount of energy that has to be spent on controlling classes, evaluating papers and assignments, and other tasks, the more propper they will behave students. The statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in my country indicate that students who have attended smaller classes are about 65 percent less anxiet in the future.
Moreover, not only does this method scalate teachers efficiency and allow student to understand materials more elaborately, but it ulso affects student characteristics. Indeed overcrowded classes are disordered; thereby, student do not have the chance to intract to each other in an appropriate way. In fact, a class of few students, for example 15 ones, provides them with a relaxed but intertaining environment where they can share their ideas and learn a lot of social skills such as teamwork as well. For the matter of illustration, I used to attend a class with 12 students when I was a elementry school student. My teache used to ask us to discuss every topic of every course. Had I not been in that class, I coul not have pass entrance interviews of my current job.
In conclusion, I belive that hiring more teachers to teach in small classes is by far the best option. Consequently, it is highly recomnded that governments do not neglect the importance of hiring enough teachers and prepare enough classes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09133489461 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98940058518 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543325526932 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1229454898 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.777777778 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7222222222 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229933646387 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729627004563 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711658275105 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160344694331 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666731046847 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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