High salaries with high risks of losing a job or a secure job with a low salary
Occupation, the foundation of quality life, has been valued and triggers heated discussion over whether it is sensible to choose a high-paid job with a high risk of losing a job. A less rewarding but secure job, in some people's view, should be prioritized. On the contrary, my perspective is that we should better choose careers with high salaries though at high risk of losing jobs.
To begin with, never should we ignore the positive effect of a high salary on people's life, including personal life and the whole family. Obviously, it is high salaries that enable people to purchase more things to improve their living standards. To be more specific, the more money people earned, the more likely they are to taste delicious but expensive food frequently, go traveling every month, or watch movies every week, making their lives colorful and enjoyable. How could people have the competence to afford such living standards if they choose a career with low salaries? Besides, employees who have high salaries will also place their families as beneficiaries. It is well-acknowledged that most people work in order to support the whole family. The more salaries they have, the more likely they will provide their older parents with constant medical care, and give their children access to a well-rounded education. People who get low salaries, however, may find it laborious to sustain the whole family, not to mention a better life quality.
In addition, even if the job is not secure, the risk of losing that job can be easily reduced and decreased, by improving work efficiency and establishing an intimate relationship with their leader. To begin with, never should we ignore that boosting productivity helps secure a career. To be more specific, people, by spending less time on distractions such as sending messages to friends, and browsing social media, can improve work efficiency, and thus secure the job. People can also learn some programming skills to improve work efficiency or improve production procedures so that the quality of the product will be improved. People will not be motivated if their job is secure, since even if their work efficiency is tremendously low, they will not lose that job. Besides, it is beneficial to build a harmonious bond with the superior. Specifically, only by establishing a close relationship with his executive can a person win favor and appreciation, helping employees to get promoted and less likely to be fired.
In conclusion, a rewarding but not secure job is better, because it can improve the living standard and benefit personal development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1220657277 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81119923645 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49765258216 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1415887039 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.842105263 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405225770835 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131242594066 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104230084046 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258780267625 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154212829717 0.0645574589148 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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