How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
television is a common electronic device that we can easily find in every house. tv it self tend to entertaining, delivering information, and widen the audience horizon. These content, unconsciously can give us an influence to our behavior: the outcome may be negative.
To start with, let us think carefully the influence to children. Nowadays, wa can find various T.V shows or movie program like romance,action, comedy, and thriller. however all of them are not suitable to all age, as in the movie they show vulgarity, violence, assortment, crime and many more. children can easily determine and blindly want to follow, what they see in movies. For example, children might watching their favorite super hero tv show everyday. in that show there are also a fight scene or dangerous action that trigger them to try. as you know children always have a big curiosity. it might lead them to a serious injury so, parents should be more careful in choosing the contents of the shows, watched by a child, to bring him up properly so that he can become a kind, responsible in society.
Moreover, watching tv could lead to a limitation in life social interaction. taking my family rule for example. during our dinner watching tv is prohibited. but because of the rule we having a good quality conversation with the family member. and also strengthen our family bonding. in addition overtime in tv watching can lead to a health problem. for example, my niece used to had a bad habit, she snacking and eating while watching tv. and at that time she was addicted to a reality show. she can spend like 4-6 hour a day immobilize and activity less in front the tv. she become over weight due to her bad habit.
In conclusions, tv has develop very bad impact not only unhealthy to our social live but also, serve a bad illustration to the kids. The solution is we have to be more wise in choosing the content and don't let tv taking over most our time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, you know, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73900293255 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68637707779 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601173020528 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4240503729 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.2608695652 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8260869565 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.5376344086 506% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0416542587011 0.236089414692 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0118727834893 0.076458572812 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212471998324 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0287220121744 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272909133808 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.62 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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