if people have a opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for the job that is more satisfying
These days one of the most salient issues for people is finding a good occupation. There are myriad factors that are asserted by experts to help people reaching their dreamy careers. Some people believe that if someone finds a supportive job, they have to accept it as soon as possible. But, I think that sacrificing some opportunities to earn a favorable situation is more beneficial. I will explore my point of view in the following paragraphs.
First, Psychological tips suggest that having an enjoyable occupation that can provide many options for people and satisfies various aspects of the people's life has long-term positive effects on individuals. So it is more suitable if people ignore some secure job to find their satisfactory career. It is worth being unemployed for a short time until reaching a better one because the profits that will be earned in the future job will quickly compensate the damages of being unemployed temporarily.
Second, One of the crucial ways successful people try is making some risky decisions in necessary conditions. If people want to reach a big aim, they sometimes have to accept some risks. Rejecting a safe job in the way of finding a dreamy job is a significant risk because it is plausible that a person not only cannot find a favorable job but also lost the opportunities. For instance, when my brother graduated, he gave a great suggestion from my father's company to work there. There is no doubt that this job could support his future. But he refuted that to find his favorite occupation. He was unemployed for one year, but suddenly he found a position in designing clothes company that was his desirable career. Now he has his own business, and he is so happy that he ostracized his opportunity and put his future at risk someday.
In conclusion, it is more valuable to banish some secure job to find a satisfactory one. Because, better position will influence people's lives, and doing some risky job is a part of the success and can retrieve the possible damages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...le and satisfies various aspects of the peoples life has long-term positive effects on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87536231884 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79141119786 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553623188406 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9041846877 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4444444444 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252057783032 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824166247314 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620251795187 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170998753864 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247178227737 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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