movie and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
These day, media play a significant role in yoouth's lives. TV has become a unsepratable part of the people's schedule. So movies and television can have a strong impact on human. Some people believe that movies have bad eefects on youngstars and they have dedicate little time to it while other people believe that TV not only can have positive effects but also make life more conviniet. I agree with the former view due to tow reasons.
First of all, each movie or programme is produced for a particular aim. The producers try to show a point that can help people to find their way correctly in life. Most movies attempt to convert a precious piont to younge people. By depecting a good or bad activity and showing its consequenses, let youth to be aware of the result of their desicions and activites. It can be a practical way to teach youth that what they have to do in complex time of their lives. For instance, I watched a movie one year ago; the starman in movie did not give up any way even in his hardest situation had tried to find a innovative way. As a result, he achieved his goals in spite of myriads of obstacles. That movie was a vital motivation for me and teached me how much it is crucial to be passient and hardworker in life.
Second, these days the TV programmes are containig a huge amount of courses that can make people independent to go classes to learn new skill. TV producer try to use experts people in special major to teach people their neccessary ability. For example, I was awful in cooking, and it is not affordable for me to take a class and learn culinary skills. It became a big issue for me. Sunddenly, I saw a advertisment about a programm in television which is going to show and teach people cooking by a famouse chief. After two months that I followed the courses accuratly, I learnt how to cook, and it was great for me. In this way, I not only did not spend any money but also learn how to cook from a expert chief.
In conclusion, like every technology, TV and movies have positive and negetive impacts. But I think their good influences are more notable; because they can teach youngstairs how to behave and make a good decision in their lives. Also, they provide some beneficial courses for people and help them to increase their ability free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, of course, as a result, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47255369928 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51677858511 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532219570406 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.101902335 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4782608696 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2173913043 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248232362346 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612021833641 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665805478106 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151450465709 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751244724101 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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