If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not job seekers must select a secure job immediately rather than wait for finding a satisfying job has received a great deal of attention from workers and young people. Although some may say that a satisfying job would be a guaranty for future life; I, as well as many others, believe that because of competition for finding a job, have a lot of educated people, and have the opportunities for promotions in every job, job seekers must select a secure job.
First of all, an important reason why selecting a secure job has a lot of positive points is that in this age competitive for finding a job is increased. In the modern era, because of high technology, many jobs and works are eliminated, and these jobs are replaced by high technology. Also, by progressive of the internet and computer systems, most of the jobs are merged, and they become one duty. In this situation, when many jobs are eliminated or combine together, the job opportunities are increased so that young people would select secure jobs to guaranty their future life.
Another reason for this point of view is that the number of educated people is increased in this age. Because of established many universities and school, most children and young people prefer to go to school and university. Furthermore, parents have known about the importance of the influence of education on children’s life. In this situation, the number of educated people is increased rather than in the past. Most educated people are want to have a proper career that suitable and has a high level in the societies; hence, the competition between job seekers will be increased. In this situation, if young people find a secure job, they must select it without any doubts.
Finally, it is occasionally said that people must take the opportunity for having a secure job because there are not any satisfying jobs in society, and people should build their own favorable job. Many company managers say that the definition of a satisfying job may vary a lot among a group of job candidates. For example, for some people, income is the most important aspect of their job, and they would work under any condition just for having a high salary. On the other hand, some other aspects like working hours, health insurance and working conditions may be more important for some other job candidates. Therefore, there is not a wildly accepted satisfying job available, and people should take a secure job and try to make it how they want it to be.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that if a person has the chance to get a secure job, he or she should take it without any doubts chiefly due to hard condition for finding a job and the opportunities for promotions in every job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not job seekers must select a secure job im...
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Line 10, column 641, Rule ID: WILDLY_ACCEPTED[1]
Message: Did you mean 'widely'?
Suggestion: widely
...b candidates. Therefore, there is not a wildly accepted satisfying job available, and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82413087935 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70970482534 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427402862986 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2677938699 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.055555556 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.530252280016 0.236089414692 225% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188285638662 0.076458572812 246% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114109781676 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325478994686 0.150856017488 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953078408085 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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