If someone wants to travel to different countries, do you think that it is better to travel abroad when he or she is young and has lots of energy, or do you think that it is better to travel abroad when he or she is older and more experienced?
Some people suggest that traveling abroad when you become old and experienced is better. They say that experience can help you tackle obstacles you encounter on a trip. However, in my opinion, I strongly believe that traveling abroad when you are young is more beneficial. I will illustrate my viewpoint by following two reasons.
First of all, variety of many different experiences are required for the young because they can smoothly learn from it. For example, younger people are more likely to accept other country’s culture easily. Some might argue that age does not have influence in absorbing new cultures or different lifestyles. However, it is somewhat true that elders are more fixated and have some kind of prejudice or stereotypes paradoxically, due to their longer life experiences and knowledge acquired by it. When my family visited other country, I could find out that my parents were inclined to having experiences which they already know, while my sibling and I tried to participate in new, exotic experiences like taking adventures to the harsh nature like deserts and rainforests. Thus, because adopting original and fresh experience to the young is easier and faster, I think it is better for young people to travel abroad.
Second of all, health conditions differ between the young and elders. In detail, generally the young have better physique compared to elders which helps them travel with less effort. When traveling abroad, we have to spend our energy on physical activities such as walking or sometimes climbing, hiking as well. For example, let’s suppose we are visiting Peru in South America. The most famous city, Cusco lies about in 4000m altitude, and its nearby Machu Pichu lies in high altitude as well. Because of its high altitude meaning that oxygen being scarce in the air, many people have difficulties in performing physical activities. In most cases, elder people suffer from these symptoms more than younger people. Consequently, these can disturb elders traveling around the nation compared to non-suffering younger people.
To conclude, whether traveling abroad when one is young or old can be a controvertible topic. Some think traveling when you are old is better because you are more affluent in both money and time. However, I still believe that traveling when you are young has more benefits compared to traveling when you are old because of the necessity of versatile experience and easiness on adopting those experience as well. Also, better health conditions lead to easier traveling without going through difficulties depending on your physical status.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 27, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...two reasons. First of all, variety of many different experiences are required for the young ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, i think, kind of, such as, first of all, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23095238095 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67178399299 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0605624954 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8636363636 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340017368205 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110201577866 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113994529636 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244494304663 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117008088855 0.0645574589148 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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