It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.
Most people believe that understanding ideas and background of a knowledge is more important than the knowledge itself. They cite the importance of the chain of ideas which can develop into a fact. However, in my opinion, I mostly disagree with these people and claim that remembering facts is more crucial to the students. I will support my viewpoint with the following two reasons.
First of all, students are evaluated by tests which measures student's memorization of facts. In every semester, students are required to take couple of important exams which are presented in the name of mid-term or final exam. Tests are conducted in a limited amount of time and albeit there are subjects which measures the student's logical thinking capability like mathematics, there are more subjects which evaluates how well a student remembers factual information about the topic such as history, geography and biology. To get a better evaluation on their final grades, I think students need to memorize and focus on factual information.
Second of all, one can deduct ideas and concepts easily if they know the facts. For example, suppose a person knows the planet orders in the solar system. If he or she remembers that Mars is closer to the sun compared to Saturn, it is more likely that they can deduct that average temperatures will be higher on Mars. Although understanding the background concepts might be beneficial to deducting the fact as well, its chances are low that you can remember the exact numeric information. To clarify, I think it is easier to bring out ideas and concepts based on facts rather than the opposite.
To conclude, whether to value in between concepts and facts can be somewhat controversial depending to persons. Some suggested that understanding ideas and concepts is better because it helps students understands topics comprehensively. Nevertheless, I still believe that remembering facts is more beneficial to the students because it leads to a better performance in overall student's grades and facts can help bring out the knowledges' concepts and ideas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'knowledge'.
Suggestion: knowledge
...t understanding ideas and background of a knowledge is more important than the knowledge it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, well, for example, i think, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15339233038 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8648459706 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530973451327 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3404608741 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.1875 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350922434935 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107238723543 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646716039971 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196968193947 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554011842759 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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