If there’s a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?
• take more exercise
• eat healthy food
• reduce the amount of stress
By and large, throughout the modern era, the human’s life have been complicated and different types of elements effect on human’s life such as the increasing progressions in technologies and producing the new equipment. Then, scientists and expertise are going to find and introduce the best approaches for all human beings all around the world to improve and elevate themselves, and consequently with those manners the quality of life will increase. A controversial question which is often raised here regarding this idea is that taking more exercise, eating healthy food or reducing the amount of stress, which one is the best choice to improve human’s life. In my perspective, I firmly believe that the consumption of healthy food is a reasonable manner to improve ourselves. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons and examples, justifying my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned here is that nowadays approximately in all societies, men and women have to work hard to gain more incomes and provide their requirements and in the long run the lack of enough attention to their health especially food consumed by them, may increase the risk of difficult diseases in all societies like cancers, heart failures and diabetes, etc. These diseases effect not only individual’s life but also societies and their members. The governments must provide the financial reservoirs to cure these patients and also building the modern equipped hospitals and reinforcing the medical educations by teaching and researching in the field of medicine. To illustrate, I would like to mention the available statistics about this issue and according to statistics, annually Iran governments must allocate a great budget about 45 billion dollars to prevent and cure the gastrointestinal diseases in the youth population, aged 25-45, while the rate of such diseases are increasing.
Furthermore, another significant reason is that eating healthy food like more fresh fruits and vegetables and reduce the consumption of fast foods and saturated oils can regulate the metabolisms of your body and subsequently enhance the ability of your immune systems to fight against pathogens which in everyday life we are subjected to them everywhere and may contaminate the susceptible individuals. The results of a recent study in Duke University has shown that the rate of heart attacks in families with lower consumption of fast foods is 36% less than families which 2 or 3 times in a week would eat fast foods such as pizza and fries.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the consumption of healthy food can prohibit the increasing rates of dangerous diseases in societies’ members, and also ones can elevate their body strength against different type of sickness. Consequently, it is highly recommended that the authorities and government all around the world must pay attention more to the investments on people’s awareness about eating healthier foods and their merits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, then, while, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2569.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30785123967 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02124828948 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.8623081989 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 197.615384615 100.406767564 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2307692308 20.6045352989 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207828716671 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737869527365 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108671294674 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120326178785 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677851592229 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.2 11.7677419355 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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