Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People communicate with each other less than in the past because of the popularity of television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
By and large, in modern era, it has established beyond doubt that the invention of the television is of the pivotal effect on everyone’s life.
Some people may hold the view that the communication with each other decreased due to television’s popularity in comparison to the past, but some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that there are other reasons. I firmly believe that the inclination in the people’s communication is not because of the television. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons and examples justifying my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned here is that nowadays in the industrialized societies, men and women to have a better life, find a satisfied job and more incomes, must study hard and elevate the level of their education. Consequently, when they came back home, they prefer to take a rest or spend much more time with their families. It seems that these individuals have not got enough time to watch a television programs and they cannot communicate with other people properly. For example, when I was a child, my mother was an accountant and worked in a huge company. She couldn’t do her motherhood tasks and she often was tired and even could not watch the television or visit her family members.
Furthermore, another significant point is that with the progression of technologies like high-tech vehicles, cell phones, video games, people have taken more time on them, and they sometimes prefer to be alone with their devices. The results of a recent study conducted in young people, aged 16-45 years old, in my country showed that the 56% of these young people have spent more than 20 hours on their cell phones or playing the video games and they have even refused to attend in family parties.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that today the popularity of the television is not the main reason of limited communication among people with regard to the past .
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Suggestion: was often
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Suggestion: .
...ion among people with regard to the past .
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, for example, by and large, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01179941003 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96412225815 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572271386431 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9354637624 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.583333333 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220918445686 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803560053136 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071115831202 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119680549511 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922311421376 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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