If there’s a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?
1. take more exercise
2. eat healthy food
3. reduce the amount of stress
It goes without saying that life has several crucial aspects which we acquire to accomplish them in order to continue the rest of life more efficiently. Consider there is a way to improve yourself among three choices: take more exercise, eat healthy food or reduce the amount of stress. Which one you would take? From my perspective, I would to choose the first one to improve myself. I will elaborate on my choice through two strong reasons.
The first reason to be mentioned is that I would like to lose weight and become fit because being unfit makes me very unpleasant and reduce my self-confidence. Indeed, when you do not have a beautiful and on shape body you do not like to be with people or in public places because no one like and enjoy from seeing a fat girl. Furthermore, I would take more exercise to have a healthy and fit body. Although take exercise not be sufficient and I need a healthy diet taking exercise make this process easier and more accessible for me. Lastly, taking exercise improves my self-confidence and also I feel more comfortable when I am in public places.
The second reason is that taking exercise has perfect effects on individual’s mind. When I do exercise I feel happier and have a perfect sight to the world. It makes me very positive person to cope with difficult situations. For example, hard exercises cause people feel more powerful and consequently they believe they can do everything with their power. This physical power has influences on their mind. They will not be a weak person in front of their problems. They always try to do their best. My friend is a professional athlete. She always tried hard to become professional. Furthermore, she becomes a firmly person and nothing can go over her. Lastly, I really want to be such a person in my life.
To put it briefly, taking more exercise can have several important effects on my life. Not only can I have an on shape body like models but also it causes positive effects on my mind to cope with difficult situation. Although stress and diet are two of crucial elements in my life I need more to take exercise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 612, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('firmly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('person') instead of another adjective.
... professional. Furthermore, she becomes a firmly person and nothing can go over her. Lastly, I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, lastly, really, second, so, for example, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68266666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68970845178 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4693452712 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1666666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.625 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291882980567 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897035707616 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133555173275 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203912616633 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165991186944 0.0645574589148 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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