If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, if I had a chance to change one thing about my hometown, I would definitely choose to cultivating the trees. Tree cultivation can provide us with a fresh air, because in recent years Mongolia has been suffering from some diseases caused by air pollution. The number of people who are dying because of air pollution is increasing day by day. However, we can solve the air pollution problems, by growing up trees. Trees provide us with an oxygen which will help us to breath more easily, and it will invoke the nature beauty.
First of all, I believe that trees are the main factor to breath by fresh air. Nowadays, some countries all around the world is facing with the air pollution, especially Mongolia. People in our country have their private cars, besides public transportation. Additionally, most of the cars are imported and used by Japanese people beforehand. Therefore, it releases smokes which is negatively influence to people. So, we need to solve this problem by cultivating more trees in our hometown.
Also, I think that we can invoke the nature beauty by seeing beautifully growing trees. For example, there is tree which is known as sakura. Moreover, it has a pink leaves which look so beautiful when they are blooming during the spring time. Adittionally, as they throwing out their leaves it looks more beautiful and give me a feeling as if I am walking in the forest or something like that.
However, some people might think as they are getting older they wouldn't be able to release some oxygen. Therefore, it will be a cumbersome plant without an importance. Nevertheless, in my point of view we can dig up old trees and recycle it. For example, we could do paper with them or cut their branches and make some souviners or other things. Take a case of mongolian people, we make the interesting and valuable souviners that can catch up the interest of foreign countries. Therefore, my country has famous for the wooden souviners. Also, we make IQ games that can expand the children' ability to think outside the box.
All in all, although it might will bulk as time going by, in my point of view, trees will never lost their valuable quality. For instance, releasing oxygen which is the main source of living animals. In addition, invoke the beauty of nature, as I mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77860696517 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61436158798 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547263681592 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.434946567 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.84 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.08 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0457483387127 0.236089414692 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0134619024812 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421516285633 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0238258221652 0.150856017488 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281906129716 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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