If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
I live in İstanbul City. This city has very great things, such as different kind of restorants, cafes and so on. Moreover İstanbul city was effected by Ottoman Empires and other empires in the past. It gives very great historical structure and cultures. However, all these great specialities İstanbul has significant problem to living under the good conditions. In the other words, there are lots of problem, but one of them is really important. It is transportation beacuse İstanbul city is the most crowded city in Turkey. I am going to explain why I consider that problem is worther than others in 3 diffirent kind of aspects.
İstanbul city had settlement by the people all over the history which is mean this city had occupied or controled by some kings. At the began İstanbul city had huge wealth and in this circumstances this city was taken immagration for a long time.
Nowadays, İstanbul city has been crowded beacuse there is many companies in the city. Beacuse of that condition people live and work in this city. But there is a lot of traffic jams. For example, despite I have a car, I hardly ever use car to get somewhere in İstanbul. Even car gives more confortable, I have never been used car for domestic travel. As also other public transportation has same problem, they are using same way to go anywhere.Only subway and railway could be more usefull and benefical for citizen.Beacuse these public transportation has thier own way. They never use to normal way. In my view railway and subway has potential to fix İstanbul city's traffic problem.
Although railway and subway the most greatest thing to fix İstanbul city traffic problem. It is not enough for these huge kind of problem. In my opinion government has take some measure to cut to immagretion for İstanbul city. I believe that it could be with development other city in Turkey. For example, government decided to open new industrial companies which is about product clothes in Sourthern part of Turkey. Moreover that government had been investment for tea companies in the North part of Turkey. I absoultly support these kind of investment beacuse it means jobs for people who are living there. In the result, these people do not come in İstanbul city. It is cut the most of immagration in İstanbul city.
Other important measure is about universities and collages. Nowadays most of the valuable universities in İstanbul city. This means that İstanbul is taken student from other cities in Turkey. If government creats some great university in other city these student had never been live in İstanbul city. Moreover all these students which they had been came in İstanbul. They decided to find thier jobs in İstanbul beacuse they already had used to live in this city.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...nt kind of restorants, cafes and so on. Moreover İstanbul city was effected by Ottoman E...
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...nditions. In the other words, there are lots of problem, but one of them is really important. I...
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...m is worther than others in 3 diffirent kind of aspects. İstanbul city had sett...
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...others in 3 diffirent kind of aspects. İstanbul city had settlement by the peo...
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...an İstanbul city had huge wealth and in this circumstances this city was taken immag...
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Suggestion: there are many companies
... İstanbul city has been crowded beacuse there is many companies in the city. Beacuse of that condition ...
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... they are using same way to go anywhere.Only subway and railway could be more useful...
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Suggestion: Beacuse
... more usefull and benefical for citizen.Beacuse these public transportation has thier o...
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...o fix İstanbul citys traffic problem. Although railway and subway the most gr...
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.... Although railway and subway the most greatest thing to fix İstanbul city traffic prob...
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Suggestion: most the greatest
.... Although railway and subway the most greatest thing to fix İstanbul city traffic prob...
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...f problem. In my opinion government has take some measure to cut to immagretion for ...
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...ct clothes in Sourthern part of Turkey. Moreover that government had been investment for...
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...rth part of Turkey. I absoultly support these kind of investment beacuse it means jobs for...
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...en student from other cities in Turkey. If government creats some great university...
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...ats some great university in other city these student had never been live in İstanbul city. M...
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...t had never been live in İstanbul city. Moreover all these students which they had been ...
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Suggestion: come
... all these students which they had been came in İstanbul. They decided to find thier...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, so, for example, kind of, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93162393162 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72589616428 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425213675214 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0224904783 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9393939394 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1818181818 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0354391261552 0.236089414692 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0123997358504 0.076458572812 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0203639208221 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0219902930942 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151027026957 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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