If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer
The hometown we live in the most important part of our lives. It is the place where we spend most of our time and many years of our life. I live in a small hometown and there are many things I would like to change it. Therefore, as and when presented with the opportunity for changing one thing in my hometown, I believe that I shall be tempted to lean towards constructing a super mall complex is a fantastic idea. I believe It's the most needed thing for two important reasons, which I will express in the following essay.
The first exquisite reason is Increasing job. To construct a mall, many people are needed including but not limited to civil engineers, labor workers, mechanical engineers, architects and truck drivers. It will open the door of multiple jobs for my hometown people. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Three years year, I read in a newspaper that one of the nearest towns was making a super mall and for that, they were hiring a lot of people for the construction. After a while, I notice that many neighborhood people got a job there. And also the advertisement in the newspaper couldn't stop as they need more workers to run the mall. As a result, I believe that If my hometown gets a wonderful opportunity by building a mall it will be very conducive for my hometown people.
The Second imperative reason is an improvement in roads and some other basic stuff. The constructing mall will collect a lot of tax money, which the government can use that for the betterment of town people like improvement in roads and schools or constructing a garden for children. Also, it helps to increase the value of the area. For instance, I saw that after 2 -3 years of building that mall in my near hometown, their roads were replaced from one lane to three-lane with better quality, the big garden was constructed, a new restaurant and multiplex theater opened. And I read in times magazine that It is all because of government is getting a lot of tax money from the mall businesses. And also as per the report posted in the year 2015 by dr. John and his team proved that that hometown tax in increase to 38% after constructing a mall. as a result, my firm conviction is that Constructing a mall will increase the tax revenue and creates lots of advantages for the hometown people.
In the nutshell, though some may oppose the ides, a new super mall addition will be a prudent choice. Not only it helps to create extensive jobs for hometown people but also helps to increase tax money which can be used for the betterment of hometown people. I think every government should think for the benefits of the addition of a super mall and apply it soon in their hometown.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56057494867 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66522813399 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455852156057 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1056452209 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5416666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2916666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.79166666667 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103861372142 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363084735282 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446352018518 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0751475344627 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489934299736 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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