If you were the leader of the country, what kind of policy would you use to succeed?
1. Creating job for unemployed people
2. Develop agriculture and reduce food prices
3. Develop Housing
The world is changing at a rapid pace due to the action of leaders. it is very challenging for each leader to choose the most effective policy to lead his country toward success. Every leader has their own preferred methods, and all of them have their own benefits. As far as I am concerned, we can push our country toward success by engendering job opportunities for unemployed people. I feel this way for two main reasons which will be explored in the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account the fact that having a job gives the people a sense of purpose, which is necessities for each government. people can establish both long and short term goals for themselves, and also accomplish their professional goals which gives them a sense of satisfaction. Consequently, this people can readily enhance all aspects of their own country if their leader provides for them appropriate job. my own experience is a compelling answer. when I was graduated from university, I had stared with my friends to focus on a specific subject that was totally helpful for my country. Although we tried to achieve new discoveries, we did not strive for each day because we were unemployed and did not have enough incentive because the leader never relied on us. Finally, the previous leader changed After four years, and our new leader was savvy, since provided new job for unemployed people to make a prosperous country. In hence, we found new job and developed our research, so we obtained our goals and pushed our country toward success.
The second noteworthy reason is that the leader can surmount funding crisis which all countries are facing them by creating job for unemployed people. when accomplished people struggling with their job, can cooperate with international companies or produce manufactured goods with high quality and export it to other countries. Furthermore, they can generate profits through corporate sponsorship with other country. Thus, they can generate money for country. By this policy our country overcome the funding crisis. Moreover, I recently hear news reported that within three decades some parts of Europe are encountering funding crisis because they never trust their people and barely create job opportunities for their people. Had leader created job for unemployed people they would have made a breakthrough and surmounted problems.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that a leader has to germinate job for workless people to succeed. this is because the people will encourage enough to help their country in all facet and because this people can eliminate funding crisis by injecting money for their country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, so, thus, as to, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13333333333 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74474864632 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3994211198 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7727272727 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182138172729 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627589856864 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472950707319 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11896641696 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247924887533 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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