TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
On every list of crucial responsibilities of government, endorsing legislation ranks near the top. countries have their own preferred methods, and attempt to endorse stringent rules for their people. The controversial question which arises here is whether these rules are too strict that young people obey them or not. If I were to establish laws for my country, I would definitely propose lenient laws. It is my firm belief that gentle legislations are more fruitful for my country for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that strict rules never allow adolescents to think creatively, and most of the time young people have been hampered by these firm laws. As a result, teenagers lose a sense of purpose, so never strive for their plans meticulously. In contrast, when government establish rules that are not tough, adolescents generate both short and long goals according to these laws, and they steadily endeavor for their objects to achieve them. my own experience is a convincing answer. following my graduation from university, I drew up plans to commence a small software development firm. my plan was exceptionally detailed, and I was confident that my business would be a success. However, when I made an effort to inaugurate my profession I perceived, because of difficult legislations in my country I was not qualified to do my job. Therefore, I lost my purpose and never tried to think creatively. Had my country endorsed gentle legislations, I would not have restricted by these laws and followed my ambitions.
The second remarkable reason is that when government decide to provide strict laws for country, institute and company, young people can't relax and they do not relieve their tensions. government aggravate teenager’s anxiety because they are constantly struggling how to resolve their tasks with these hard legislations. Moreover, they can't focus on specific areas of a subject, for they have to accomplish their tasks with stress. my opinion on this matter has profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. when I was a sophomore student, I was working as an intern at the local magazine that was adjacent to my neighbor. they expected to obey their arduous rules that was according to the government legislations. Not only I got nervous most of the time, but also I lost my concentration when I was engaged with my works. As a result, I abandoned my country to live without anxiety.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that endorsing stringent legislations can be disturbing for country because young people lose their purposes and never attempt hard such a diligent person for their achievements and because they live always with stress and they can't focus effectively to carry out their tasks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13793103448 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96801906798 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521551724138 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4973860579 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.652173913 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1739130435 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107280907473 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03694671607 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456010680745 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701678388811 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172960761967 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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