TPO 34Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on a cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples t
there is no shortage of debate that technology is being developed at a galloping rate, and it has own benefits and disadvantages. the controversial question which arises here is whether teaching children is such a difficult task because of the new technology. as far as i am concerned, spend plentiful of time on cell phone, social media and video game make the proccess of learning harder for children. i feel this way for two main reasons which will be explored in the following paragraphs.
first of all, one should take into account the fact that expending abundant time on cell phone and video game allows the adolecsant to barely focus on their education. that is, student doing a broad overview on lessons rather than struggling with the specific of a subjects. as a result, it is harder for them to learn new materials. my brother experience is a compelling answer. when he arrived to school he was addicted by video games, and play online game most of the time. that mades my parents agitated, for their child didn't show a sign of motivation in his lessons. consequently, my parents interdicted my brother to play video games. after a while, we saw the sign of proggres in his lesson and the educating was easier by eliminating video games.
another remarkable reason illuminate why i believe cell phone, videogame and social networking has an adversely effect on educationg children is that most of the tenagear think thechnology is a very profitable and is a good source of revenue in today's life. moreover, according to recent surveys student study hard to have a lucrative job in future. however, by new technology and social media they find it a very efficient way to raise their incomes. for instance, when i was in primary school i always had a plan to be an enterprising person in the future and thought that by working on social networking i can achieve my aims. in hence, i never study hard, and the teaching procces was very hard. when i went to university and was a freshman i percieved that i have to studying hard and effect my social media.
in conclusion, educating children is more difficult today because they can't focus on specific subject and because they consider social media as a way to earn money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77835051546 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74060099706 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54381443299 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7116565594 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5789473684 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.5376344086 560% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250577343582 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634682610789 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617345893777 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158407390501 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554263661986 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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