Imagine you could improve the town where you live by changing one important thing about it. Which of the following would you choose to do?
Build additional parks
Construct more libraries
Improve public transportation
Use specific details and examples in your answer. Do not use memorized examples.
It is critically important to assess what improvement is the most influential to daily life of citizens before making decision about the development. Personally, I believe that increasing quality of public transportation will benefit many individuals' life including me. I feel this way for three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, people tend to use their private vehicle if they are familiar with the fact that quality of public service of transporting is impoverished, which signifies extent of traffic jam will probably increase. Therefore, many people will expend a lot of time on the highway because of congestion on the road irrespective of what type of vehicle they utilize. On the other hand, if service and quality of public service seems satisfactory on people's eyes, they will employ the vehicle of nation instead of consuming enormous amount of money for gasoline by using their own automobile. Hence, every people who commute to their school and office will benefit from the improvement of it since traffic jam will diminish. According to survey in Mongolia,my indigenous nation, most of the car drivers stated that they will choose public service if it was of adequate quality.
Secondly, people who frequently employ the transportation spend hours waiting for bus everyday, which is extremely inadequate and time consuming throughout winter in my nation. If number of buses transporting citizens increase, people will expend less time on the bus station. Therefore, they will be less exposed to some disease caused by cold temperature, and use their time more efficiently. For instance, last winter, I nearly waited a bus for nearly two hours in order to go to my university. Thereby, I got flu because of cold temperature. Moreover, I expend certain amount of time by virtue of the insufficient number of transportation every day. If the transportation system improves, I will spend these hours studying my lesson at my warm home.
Finally, as I always see, there are enough amount of libraries and parks in my hometown. For this reason, I would not have spend fiscal funding for these things even if I had chance to do. For instance, I usually go to library with my companions because it is accessible to us. Furthermore, I hardly see other people at the library, whenever I get there, because people of my hometown do not have to gather in one place since they have multifarious choice of libraries. By the same token, there are plenty of parks in the city, where I live. Therefore, additional parks and libraries are truly unnecessary in my hometown.
In summation, I am of the opinion of that improving situation and quality of public transportation system is essential for people of my hometown. This is because traffic jam will diminish, time efficiency of individuals will increase, last but not least, the number of libraries and parks are sufficient in my city.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...public transportation will benefit many individuals life including me. I feel this way for ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , my
...iminish. According to survey in Mongolia,my indigenous nation, most of the car driv...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...nsportation spend hours waiting for bus everyday, which is extremely inadequate and time...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...ally, as I always see, there are enough amount of libraries and parks in my hometown. ...
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Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...town. For this reason, I would not have spend fiscal funding for these things even if...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, to begin with, by the same token, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06776180698 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92633955386 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486652977413 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0274858298 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.304347826 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1739130435 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69565217391 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111161236921 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385422755973 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282905649659 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700104454881 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209699619471 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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