Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 13: A/D? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
In the past, before 1800 A.D., most of the people were lived around the castle in suburban. they worked as tenants, growing crops for the whole community. In order to exploit labor force completely, they live together with their relatives, which named extended family. But the situations are pretty different right now and the extended families are less important, comparing with 18 centurys.
The most part would be the difference of works. Back in the days, people were mostly farmers and they tend to live together as an extended family in order to make use of everyone in the house. The same kind of work would be passed on to the next generation so their children would do the exact same work as their parents. Therefore, the whole family stayed in the same place and work as a team generation by generation. That is why the extended families were so important back then. However, modern people are more independent and we have so many career options to choose, like architects, painters, engineers, bankers. And it certainly broke the connection between relatives in the families. We are now free from the land restriction and work restriction. We can move wherever we want without punishments.
Then, the developement of the cities made the extended families even less essentail to our lives. In the big cities, people lived in apartments, which means that people are seperated into little group or individual. As a result, we have less contacts with others, including our relatives even though they might lived in the same building.
Last but not least, self consciousness are more enhanced these days, we care more about ourselves than the monarch or inadequate medeival rules. For example, we almost heard something that encourages this trend like "you should be proud of youself.", "this is who you are." All these sentences reflect the modern scene of our lives and it was not possible to say that in the past. Consequently, the importance of individual overshadowed that of extended families.
Due to the reasons above, the extended families are now less important than in the past. Although, some might suggest that it is still essentail for us to stay in touch with our gradparents and cousins, the importance of the extended families are reduced by many factors and there are only a few people live as a huge family nowadays.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...re lived around the castle in suburban. they worked as tenants, growing crops for th...
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Line 9, column 238, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun contacts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...oup or individual. As a result, we have less contacts with others, including our rel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, for example, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03037974684 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70846560468 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536708860759 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8146225987 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.619047619 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204122168276 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665891296011 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860213553127 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125550150834 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783157296136 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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