It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
do you agree or disagree?
Since the dawn of civilization, people have been looking for a well-paid and decent job and put their efforts so as to find an appropriate career in order to become successful in the long run. Stemming from this fact, a relevant question that is a moot point is whether children should opt for a job same as their parent's job or choose differently. Due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that children should be required to do their best in every field and make an effort to reach a conspicuous success in their job. The following paragraphs will aptly substantiate my personal stance.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that one of the utmost important duties on the shoulder of parents is raising their children who are well-adjusted to the society, away from all prevailing anomalies. Generally phrased, parents are knowledgeable and experienced people, so, they should bend over backward to help their children have a prosper career whether similar to their job or not. As a vivid example, majorities of children select their careers based on their parents' job and after a few day, they realize that there is no hope and interest. Indeed, they have figured out that their job is frustrating and there is no incentive and motivation to keep on the job. To elucidate more on this issue, it is incumbent upon parents to guide their children not only in their careers but also in whole life. In this way, not only can emotional bond become stronger but also parents will witness their children's progress day in day out.
Another reason that should not go unnoticed is that parents should always encourage their children to do different tasks in order to learn how to view life differently. If children do the exactly the same task, they might not take the responsibility of their works. If we take a minute to ponder over it, with different jobs children will learn how to live independently and how to experience life for themselves. In this situation, they will become mature enough to come up with a sound decision and hardly can they do something wrong. Going into the depth, this process will patronize children not to rely on their parents when confronting trials and tribulations. However, the reasons above are just one side of the coin. A job similar to parent's job will certainly provide an opportunity for children to make a progress in a blink of an eye. In fact, parents want to witness the success of their children. So, it is more likely to galvanize them to opt for a job same as their works.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...id and decent job and put their efforts so as to find an appropriate career in order to ...
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Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...er backward to help their children have a prosper career whether similar to their job or ...
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Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun day seems to be countable; consider using: 'few days'.
Suggestion: few days
... based on their parents job and after a few day, they realize that there is no hope and...
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Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the exactly the'. Did you mean 'exactly the'?
Suggestion: exactly the
...o view life differently. If children do the exactly the same task, they might not take the resp...
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Line 5, column 814, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...ide an opportunity for children to make a progress in a blink of an eye. In fact, parents ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, as to, in fact, by and large, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74786324786 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6972482142 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0988290612 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.80952381 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43074304853 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139266980283 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102353126881 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242593911366 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140314844876 0.0645574589148 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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