It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.

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It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.

Some of people think children has great oppurtinity if they are choosing same jobs with their parents.Becuase they defens to it is great for getting knowledge about a job.Others think that children are not choosing same job with thier parents. According to them children never have great think with a job. In my opinion children can choose parents' job beacuse they had already known very valueable specialities about any jobs. In the other words I agree with following statement and I am going to explain why I agree with in several reasons.

Children the most important things for their parents in the world.In this reason parents always want to thier children to be perfect.Under the this definition if a child had decided to do same job with parents,it would beneficial to him or her.Beacuse a child do not have to search any job when he or she will been graduated form a high school or an university. In other words, children are be able to find job directly when they will graduated form any level of education. For example, when I was a student at high school I had many friends one of my friends had worked with their father in a small company instead of they finished high school.This company was related with cars and my friends had great experiences about cars and thier engines. He had been learning great things about car even he only worked with his father.In this reason even a child did not graduate from university he or she has a chance find a job if they are choose same jobs with their parents.

Other reasons why I consider that children should choose same jobs with parents is given great knowledge about market. In other explaination For instance, I remember to when I was a student at university I really interested in politics and international relations. I had a friend which is student an university and she had choosed to Political Sciences department at university. When asked to her why you were choose that department, she told me I had choosed that department beacuse my father had been working for government at that time.We never cut our relationship we are meeting sometimes with her.She has found great job in Minister of Foregin Affairs beacuse of her father.As she got the chance working in there,she was taken great referans by her father.

In the conclusion,children should choose a job which is same with their parents' job for these reasons.A child has huge oppurtinity in terms of find a job and he or she get great experiences about any job. If I had to chanced to worked same job with my father, I would prefered to work same job beacuse of mentioned reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nt kind of restorants, cafes and so on. Moreover İstanbul city was effected by Ottoman E...
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...nditions. In the other words, there are lots of problem, but one of them is really important. I...
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...m is worther than others in 3 diffirent kind of aspects. İstanbul city had sett...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, so, for example, kind of, such as, in my opinion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93162393162 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72589616428 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425213675214 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0224904783 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9393939394 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1818181818 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0354391261552 0.236089414692 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0123997358504 0.076458572812 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0203639208221 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0219902930942 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151027026957 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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