It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that very different from their parent's job.
According to the industrialization of the communities, diversification of the existing jobs gradually is increased in recent years. Consequently, children have more than before the option to choose their job. Some people prefer that their children should follow their parents' jobs. Even though others think that children are entitled to choose every job which they are interested to. When it comes to me, I would follow those give a child this right to choose every job that he or she wants. I have several reasons for my statement, some of the most persuasive of which are elaborated in detail in the following:
First and foremost, interest in work is one of the most cardinal issues to do work. As Steve Jobs said that "find your interest in a work and follow your interest". there are likely some children that not only do not interest them to their parents' job but also, they hate that job. So, if children are supposed to do their parents' job and moreover, they do not be interested in that job, precisely would be failed through their job.
As another reason, development in the world and industrialization of the cities causes us to appear in a wide range of new jobs, that last generations have never worked in such jobs. Therefore, these new jobs need a new expert, who learned this job and are able to accept the responsibilities related to these newer jobs. As an example, working in the subject of Nano-technology, which is a contemporary issue in the world currently, will be developed when there be experts and researchers whose parents' job basically was not related to the Nano-technology.
Third, a wide range of jobs which were doable in the parents' generation is out of style now such as CD production. Some of the work during the development of the science would be unnecessary in society. For example, When Flash and Hard disks are available in the market, anyone would buy a CD for saving their data. So, children of workers in such jobs if follow their parents; job which is out style, certainly would not able to have sufficient outcome of their job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...was not related to the Nano-technology. Third, a wide range of jobs which were ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, third, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81666666667 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88824244904 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1301936069 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.375 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433803104365 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165819815586 0.076458572812 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123483226889 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280936273979 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910408441074 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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