It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not children gain positive points by choosing a job which similar to their parents compared to selecting different careers has received a great deal of attention from parents and teenagers. Although some may say that selecting a job that differs from parent’s jobs helps children to become independent; I, as well as many others, believe that by choosing a similar career children have several positive points such as reducing failure, increasing the chance of becoming a success, and saving time and energy.
First of all, an important reason why having a similar job has better than having a different job is that parents know about most of the work’s risks. When people want to start a new job; whit ought any doubts; they will face many risks and challenges. In this situation, it is important to know how they must manage risks and challenges. If people have enough information about challenges, they would prevent failures in their work. So, by selecting a job which is similar to parents, father and mother know about most of the challenges, and they prevent to children will become a failure person in their work.
Another reason for this point of view is that having a broad horizon about work helps people to become a success. Many experts believe that one step of becoming a success in the work is that having the ability for predicting positive challenges and use them. When people identify opportunities for work and start to use them, they will become a flourishing person at work. In this situation, because parents have been handling a career for many years, they have enough knowledge about positive challenges work, so that they can help children to become a flourishing and prosperous person sooner than others.
Finally, it is occasionally said that choosing parents' job is better because children could exploit the credit and the popularity of their family name, and they can save their energy and time. In many jobs having credit among other coworkers or being prominent among the customers can cause rapid promotion and development. For instance, when your family owns a famous brand, you do not need to try for finding a position in the market because you already have it.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that it is better for children to choose their parents' job than different ones chiefly due to a better chance for reducing failure, increasing the chance of becoming a success, and saving time and energy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not children gain positive points by choosi...
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Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
...lieve that by choosing a similar career children have several positive points such as re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99300699301 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56252335348 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459207459207 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.0001564944 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.8 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403719961249 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153594044168 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139406162636 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269851644056 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122831240122 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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