It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that education plays a vital role in being prosperous and thriving in life. In this regard, some people approve of this opinion that broadens knowledge in a variety of subjects is more advantageous. On the contrary, others hold the opposite point of view stating people should go in-depth of specific subjects. Personally, I concur with the standpoint the more expanded horizon in different academic subjects, the more benefit and boon that people achieve. I substantiate viewpoint with some elaboration as follows.
To commence with, should people launch on gaining experience and knowledge in the various academic fields, their intellectual abilities will expand and they will become more open-minded people. To shed light on this, human brains have an enormous capacity in order to learn and acquire valuable and precious experience and knowledge and by absorbing copious information the brain function would be enhanced. Taken this into consideration, the more exposure to different subjects, the more developed brain and strengthen intellectual abilities which could have result in the expansion of human being horizons and more open-minded humankind. In way of illustration, If people merely excel at mathematics, as the time pass, their logical and reasoning skill intensify, In contrast, their emotional ability decline in the long run. However, should they embark on broadening their knowledge for example by learning linguistic or musical subjects, the balance between their emotion and logic will be established giving rise to a more open-minded person,
The second worth-mentioning reason is that in order to develop and expand the information, human-kind should establish communication with many people leading to expand social circle and improve interpersonal ability and being exposed to new positions into the bargain. To put in the more vivid picture, every subject and field have their own special environment with different spirits. By recognizing all of them and communicate with them, people can significantly enhance their interpersonal skills, learn how to behave, and increase their resilience. In addition, expanding social circle provide opportunities in order to meet a new person or company which culminate in getting a better job offer. To exemplify, I have been a pharmacist for several years, after meeting with an epidemiology team, I embark on training epidemiology, and following that, I had an interview with a highly prestigious hospital and got a job offer from a big hospital owing to the remarkable interpersonal and scientific qualification that I gained from my new teammates.
To draw a conclusion, I strongly advocate the notion that, it is more profitable that a person has broad knowledge in the different academic subjects rather one. Due to the fact that expanded knowledge not only do enhance intellectual abilities and turns people into an open-mind person, but it also provides a precious opportunity in order to contact other people and be exposed to a better job position.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, then, for example, in addition, in contrast, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2593.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47046413502 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09043503269 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537974683544 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.294229432 48.9658058833 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.0625 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.625 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15633665093 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560156641242 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682250299442 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105401347601 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513751240257 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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