Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
It goes without saying, since the dawn of humans, being prosperous and having a sense of satisfaction consider as the most substantial and ultimate desire for humankind. In this regard, some people approve of this idea that in today's fast-paced world people feeling less gratification with their lives in comparison to the past. In contrast, others hold the opposite point of view. Personally, I concur with the idea that nowadays, people's satisfaction with life decreases compared with the past. I substantiate my standpoint as follows.
To commence with, in today's turbulent economic era in which money is the pivotal principle of life, human beings are inundated with countless monetary issues leading them to be under stress and pressure. To delineate, nowadays, the costs of living increases rapidly, and being financially secure is crucial in order to address people's basic needs such as home and food. In this vein, the first step of being secure in monetary problems is finding the appropriate job with a reasonable salary which needs extreme effort and diligence to obtain the higher qualification and become an expert in the highly competitive job market. Accordingly, should people want to have a profession and making money, they will need to have the academic background and relevant experience which obtain this achievement induce enormous pressure and anxiety for people and become less satisfied with their life. Thus. to be successful in life, human being should be under tension in order to be financially secure which give rise to reduce their happiness and pleasure in the long run.
The second worth-mentioning reason that comes into my mind is that emerging technology including mobile phones and the internet leads to increase loneliness of people who have a reverse correlation with their sense of gratification and happiness. To put in a more vivid picture, the Development of technology has a profound effect on people's lifestyle since they tend to spend major of their time on social media or the internet. Taken this into consideration, they have less opportunity to meet their family and friend which provide a tranquil and safe atmosphere to unwind and release tension. It is confirmed by solid evidence that the more time people explore social media, the more increase rate of depression they experience. Therefore. by overusing and technology people deprive establish human communication which vital for having a happy and pleasant life.
To draw a conclusion, I advocate the notion that in comparison with the past humankind's live is less satisfactory and they feel more tension. This is because not only do they face numerous monetary problems and should have secure job which need great effort, but they also have less chance of constructive human contact owing to the fact they spend major of their time on the internet and social media.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2414.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19139784946 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78663875169 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52688172043 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8646384279 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3529411765 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263241993334 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899705050069 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829608517145 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173312009402 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481618269357 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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