It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries.

The principal of being successful in life is to work persitently and with dedication towards the dream that you once dreamt when you were young. To pursue a career in which one feels most comfortable must be the aim of every individual while opting for a particular job. I feel that money is equally important, but in my view without interest and enthusiasm one cannot sustain working for a longer time. Taking this into account, I totally disagree with the topic that choosing a job based on just higher salary rather than real interest would be a good option for individuals.

Firstly, I feel this because in my view a person can only achieve what he wants when he feels that the particular job fascinates him/her. To have the desire for the job you are doing is of utmost importance and should be given equal stand against the salary. Discounting an indivdual's interst does no good for him/her, infact it harms the person in future. For instance, I had a friend who once opted for a job in business analytics just based on the high-end the salary he was getting although he had no interest in it whatsoever. The first few months he was very happy with the amount of money he was earning from the job but as time passed by he began to hate his job and got frustrated from it. I remember how he used to skip his job many times and take unnecessary leaves from work as he was totally annoyed and bored from the job. Finally he had to sacrifice that job and look for another one that he found interesting and enjoyed working in . So clearly we can see that choosing a job for its salary may work in the shorter run but might just harm you thereafter.

On the contrary, if a person has a low-salary job, but a job that he/she always wanted to do might benefit him/her in many ways. Looking at the zeal and enthusiasm with which the person is working, it is quite possible that the manager of the company might give him a huge raise. It is also quite possible that the keeness to pursue what he wants might help him/her to explore newer things, give him/her the opportunity to expand his/her business even furthter. So pursuing what people enjoy must be their primary goal over higher salaries. However, I feel that nowadays salaries are also of prime importance to people but I dont feel that people would be able to sustain in the work that they do if they do not find it intresting.

Therefore, to conclude I feel that enjoyment in work comes from the passion which an individual possess for it. The passion should always be given an upperhand for a person to be successful in whatever they pursue in life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...for him/her, infact it harms the person in future. For instance, I had a friend who once ...
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Line 3, column 838, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...totally annoyed and bored from the job. Finally he had to sacrifice that job and look f...
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Line 3, column 948, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...found interesting and enjoyed working in . So clearly we can see that choosing a j...
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Line 5, column 626, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lso of prime importance to people but I dont feel that people would be able to susta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in my view, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49369747899 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43250732521 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491596638655 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.371439196 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.578947368 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0526315789 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293765453527 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913917659208 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613566864446 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169733031748 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03652337144 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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