It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries.
The upsurge in the global economy and the accelerating pace of globalization has created new types of jobs, each with different roles and responsibilities. However, because many people find themselves unhappy with their position, the question of whether one should choose jobs with high salaries but low satisfaction is brought up frequently. Considering the current social trend, I agree with the statement that we should choose jobs with higher salaries, even if we do not enjoy them, with two supporting reasons.
First, a high salary is necessary to afford essential resources in the current society, and without them, we would be unhappy anyway. As an outcome of improved quality of life, various types of insurances and health care systems are becoming a quintessential element in our contemporary society. Like so, the current status quo increases our financial burdens; the aspects of life that we have to afford are expanding every day. For instance, many different types of insurances are needed, such as a house, health, and even car insurance. Although the purpose of insurance is to protect against a possible financial risk, the total cost of all the insurance added together is not less. Therefore, having higher salary jobs is better even if they are not enjoyable since a higher salary is the only way to handle increasing expenditures
Second, a higher salary can allow one to better prepare for sudden changes in one's occupation. It is possible to go through dismissals or layoffs during one's career life, due to which it is important to be prepared for such changes at all times. Moreover, during the period of searching for new jobs, financial burdens would occur because of the halt of income. For instance, many contemporary studies suggest that the average rate of hires is increasing every year, but consequently, the rate of layoffs is also in the same pattern. This means that layoffs may occur more frequently than ever before, and the period of unemployment will likely increase for individuals. If one chooses to pursue a job with a high salary, the degree of burden would decrease significantly and allow for more savings and better provisions for the future.
In the current society, money reigns over the globe, and its importance is rising every year. Due to the necessary budgets and the need for savings becoming crucial than ever before, a job that provides a higher salary would be a better choice over the other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...themselves unhappy with their position, the question of whether one should choose jobs with high salari...
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Line 4, column 444, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... are expanding every day. For instance, many different types of insurances are needed, such as...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...to better prepare for sudden changes in ones occupation. It is possible to go throug...
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Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...go through dismissals or layoffs during ones career life, due to which it is importa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0763546798 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74919770825 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534482758621 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.9175367831 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.8125 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319871301294 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865864555291 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100257388095 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180918816914 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919968495681 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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