It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The transition to adulthood creates many opportunities. Among them is one of the most important decisions a young person must make: whether to stay in their hometown, closer to family, or to move away and live in a new place. From my own experience, I would definitely support the latter option, since it is difficult to grow as a person unless you see more of the world.
When I first finished school, I was faced with this choice, as most are. And although it would have been convenient to simply stay at home, I opted to move to Chinatown in New York City, where I then lived for a few years. That time proved to be vital to who I have since become, largely because I had my first real exposure to cultures other than my own. Although I had certainly met people from other countries before, Chinatown was a new world to me. I learned to appreciate how widely different cultures’ foods can vary, for example. Even small details of daily life were new to me, as when my neighbors would leave their shoes outside the front door of their apartment. Seeing different lifestyles helped me become more accepting and empathetic to people not like myself.
While the culture change was helpful, more importantly, by moving away from my hometown I also created job opportunities for myself. Within a month of moving to New York, I was working as a cook in a very highly rated restaurant, which is exactly what I wanted to do. A friend of mine who still lives in my hometown, in contrast, works at a small local newspaper that he is afraid will go bankrupt. He wants to continue work as a journalist, but there are few possibilities in the area. If he had moved to New York like I did, he would have been able to apply to larger newspapers and found a more secure job.
There are many reasons to leave home. Chances to grow as a person and to have those improved career options are only two from a much longer list. I know that one day, I personally will encourage my own children to move away from home, so they can benefit as I have from the experience.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, then, while, for example, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45502645503 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56980591997 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574074074074 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9540357426 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5555555556 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160709284613 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478006788879 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453836237643 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930803014626 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360309073106 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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