Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Globalization has changed a lot, from the trade to the food we eat and the cloths that we wear. Similarly In this era, where science, technologies , economics ,etc, has helped humans to thrive and have provide better opportunities but at the cost of live away from the home or family. I agree with the statement in the prompt. It is better to shift when good opportunities are on the door.
Firstly, Many students and employees move out from their home towns to find a place where they could get employeed or to learn for their future endeavours. All big multinational companies have offices in a big cities or prestigious universities are away from their home.In order to earn money and knowledege youths are getting attracted to move out of their home towns, leaving behind their families. On the emotional side it might hurt some peope but in real life people are living poorly which is hurting them more than the separation. I am sharing my own example, I have been living out of my home town from past 2 years because I completed my graduation and there were no jobs available in my field.
Secondly, There are more things to learn apart from studying academically. People travel and learn different culture and languages, so that they can understand significance of humans and searching for a life changing experience. Recently, I an interview in which the person discovers his life partner in India and he liked this colorful country so much that he settled down their in India.
Thirdly, When people go out to study or to do job, they become independent. Back at home, People could not take decisions by their own and they have to rely on their parent for finnacially or emotionally. When they move out of their comfort zone, they have to manage their finnace and feelings, they alone have to take care of themselfs in all terms for example, When I went for the studies in New york I had to do all my work by myself from washing cloths to managing my bills and Indepence taught me to stay steady even in the worst situations.
In a nutshell, there are several advantages in moving out of your home and a whole world for learnings and opportunities. Thus, I agree with the statement about adults who are leaving their homes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...ood we eat and the cloths that we wear. Similarly In this era, where science, technologie...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...In this era, where science, technologies , economics ,etc, has helped humans to th...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... where science, technologies , economics ,etc, has helped humans to thrive and hav...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...c, has helped humans to thrive and have provide better opportunities but at the cost of...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'city'?
Suggestion: city
...ational companies have offices in a big cities or prestigious universities are away fr...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...s universities are away from their home.In order to earn money and knowledege yout...
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Message: Did you mean 'am' (first person of "to be")?
Suggestion: am
...a life changing experience. Recently, I an interview in which the person discovers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, third, thirdly, thus, apart from, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71319796954 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64668500502 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555837563452 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4247063324 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0625 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355874870963 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116128885994 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861141830054 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19479044065 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983906227541 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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