It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
It is undeniable that the amount of working's days is a popular topic which has caused heated debate in a long period of time because it affects everyone in his or her daily lives. Depends on personal experience, personality type, and emotional concern, people differ greatly in their attitudes toward this issue. As far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement that working only three days a week is more enjoyable. In the following, I will try to explain the specific reasons which I think are the most common viewpoints nowadays.
To begin with, I strongly believe that the efficiency of employees is one of the most significant factors in industry progress. It is obviously clear that in the case of enhancement of factory's yield, the less the employees work on a week. the more they can concentrate on their job. On the other hand, when one has allowed to work less days a week, he/she never brings their personal problems to work because one can arrange to take care of those problems on their non-working time at home. Thus, to see the progress of what we do is an enjoyable feeling which everyone is demanding, and also feels like we try to perform a useful job.
Another worthwhile reason it is that one with less days working in a week has more free time to spend with their family and consequently he/she will feel more alive. For example, my father works five days a week and he barely can spend time with the family and he seems to feel like a machine which it is very hard taking. Additionally, after spending years in a job, people feel overwhelmed and their life become much more the same and uniform. Thus, in order to avoid these feelings, people can turn their boring working life into a enjoyable one by working only three days a week.
To sum up, by taking into account all the above factors, we may reach the conclusion that people may find it is more enjoyable to work less days a week due to their spending more time with family, their being alive feeling, and their feeling of being useful for the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, i think, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58038147139 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44118576173 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506811989101 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.4579281292 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.071428571 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2142857143 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27324252438 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105005409244 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736150508886 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179229225543 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436094159512 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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