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It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation.

Recently, there is a surprising diversity of opinion about whether the government should spend money on improve the internet access or enhance the public transportation. In response to this situation, people hold different views based on their divergent values, educational background and personal experiences. As far as I am concerned, I disagrees with the former suggestion because it falls to explore the complexity behind it and we should consider issue according to different groups of people.

First of all, when it comes to teenager, it can be said that the public transportation is necessities. Due to they are too young to take care of themselves, many parents would consider the safety then take the subway or bus to go on. When they encounter the people who hurry to work on, the result is obviously, they cannot take on and some parents also need to go to work. So when the government spend the money on the public transportation, the teenager can go to school on time and the parents can do job in time. so it is a double lucky thing.

Second, just we talk about the adult, whoever they are, they must meet with the traffic jam in daily time. maybe it happened when they go to company or on the way when back to home. Whichever one, make us get crazy especially when the vital moment. I have horrible experience. Last summer, I finally take up all my exams and prepare to back home. In that day, I wake up early and package all my things go to the train station. Even if I go off early, but there is crowed people in the subway. So only I can doing is waiting for the next term. Finally ,when I get to the railway station, just leave me half hour to go on the train. But I have a lot of process to need to then get on the car. Finally when I do all over I cannot get the train. Because there is a train rule that when leaving time less than three minutes , the passage are not allowed to get in. I was very upset in that time and only waiting for the next train. So if there can be more public transportation, maybe I can get to the station earlier and without waiting for five hours.

In brief, according to all the preceding discussion, it occurred to me that the given statement is unreasonable because we should approach the issue from two different sides. Only by taking both groups of people into account can we avoid being biased in drawing our conclusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 340, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'disagree'
Suggestion: disagree
...xperiences. As far as I am concerned, I disagrees with the former suggestion because it f...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ime and the parents can do job in time. so it is a double lucky thing. Second,...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...eet with the traffic jam in daily time. maybe it happened when they go to company or ...
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Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...wed people in the subway. So only I can doing is waiting for the next term. Finally ,...
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Line 5, column 551, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ng is waiting for the next term. Finally ,when I get to the railway station, just ...
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Line 5, column 692, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...process to need to then get on the car. Finally when I do all over I cannot get the tra...
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Line 5, column 819, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hen leaving time less than three minutes , the passage are not allowed to get in. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, then, in brief, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4747706422 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56862720605 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51376146789 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2793374185 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2916666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130546757961 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336036118743 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771279572869 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769403973575 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650531804499 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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