The two thoughts that come into my mind when i read this topis are - "a friend in need is a friend indeed" and "peoplewill walk in and out of our lives; but only ones close to our heart, stay with us right till the end". Having said that, i strongly believe that it is important to keep your old friends than to make new friends.
Friends are extended family; they like our family know us in and out, especially childhood friends and college friends.During the innocence of childhood, we make our best friends because seldom are we judgemental, and growing together we develop that unbreakable bond of friendship, that despite our lives taking different paths , we catch up right from where we left. They have seen us grow, and know us like even we don't know ourselves.Similarly in college, we make good friends, as we step into the world of increasing responsibilities.College is the last chance that we get to behave in a carefree manner, make impulsive choices, and have fun. In this tumultous period, we make close friends because we do crazy things together and these are the people who are there for us, when we are away from family - when we are ill in cllege they take care of us, when we are short of money - they pool in to surprise us, they make us forget that we are away from home; bonds fostered during college do last a lifetime; we ought to keep them close.
These friends are the people whom we turn to for advise; they know how will we react under pressure, and know where we come from, the hardhsips that we might have faced, and remind us of our roots, thus guide us in right way.Such friends are our 4am friends, we can call them up at time; we can rely on them in terms of an adversity or an emergency.Even if we have any conflicts or issues with our famly, these are one who will immediately come to our rescue and ensure we do not take a harsh decision.
Thus, it is very importsnt that we cherish this relationship that we have with our friends as they go a long way in shaping our lives.Meanwhile, ofcourse we should network, we should make new friends, but just like the newly forged sword is a bit brittle; newly fostered bonds of friendship are tied by a loose string, We must tread carefully,as one small mistake might upset the other, ending up breaking the bond, so it takes a long time to nurture a new friendship.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, similarly, so, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51860465116 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74801343941 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518604651163 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 20.1344086022 303% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 127.574548034 48.9658058833 261% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 277.571428571 100.406767564 276% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.4285714286 20.6045352989 298% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161585825524 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147338868148 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.196152408312 0.0737576698707 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13297361361 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102284951544 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.6 11.7677419355 260% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 26.48 58.1214874552 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.7 10.1575268817 243% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 26.4 10.0537634409 263% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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