It is more important for students to study art and literature than it is to study math and science." Do you agree with the following statement? Provide reasons and examples to support your opinion.
With the development of human civilization, both STEM and humanities are extremely important in our life. It goes without saying that there is certainly no need for us to compare which one is more crucial. Moreover, students should not be forced to put more emphasis on either of these fields.
Nowadays in this free and democratic world, everyone deserves the right to choose to learn what he loves as long as it does not violate the law or morals. Every student has his own personality and talents, so it is therefore unreasonable to ask them to follow the strict footprints. Giving free and wide choices to students is the right way to let them realize the best version of themselves, instead of letting them fall into an unchangeable mold. For example, if Einstein had been asked to learn more literature or art, the famous “Theory of Relativity” might not have been proposed. In addition, it would be rue loss to human culture if Mozart had been told to study more math and science, and then wasted his talent of music. Therefore, it is undeniable that guiding students to what they love or are suited to is the best way to flourish in this world.
Art and literature are indeed essential to enhancing and improving our lives, while math and science are precisely the knowledge needed to develop our technology and give us this convenient life. Developing everything in a balanced way is how this work. Math and science enable the progress of technology; however, technology that is too advanced might lead to some new problems such as environmental pollution or cybercrime. Additionally, it is believed that the education of literature and art can provide positive effects on people, which is helpful to solve such problems. The growth of human science is also helpful to cope with troubles that technology has brought forth. Simultaneously, technology is able to stimulate ideas in literature or art, which people enable them to thrive. Without a doubt, social science and natural science complement each other to improve our world.
As we can see from above, it is necessary to impose a limit of what to learn on students, because they have the right to choose by themselves and it is also better for them. Furthermore, the development in a balanced and well-rounded way is inarguably the best way to give us access to a more wonderful world.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8855721393 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80770296871 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537313432836 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5735930058 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.111111111 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188579999188 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529656004971 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303131298534 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988926047585 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389737824898 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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