Is it more important for a teacher to try to help students to gain self-confidence than to teach them specific knowledge.
We should try to think about which characteristic is the most important thing as a student, whether it is specific knowledge or self-confident. It was commonly thought that students’ best aim is studying hard and getting high GPA, it is true that study is one thing that students must do but I firmly argue that gaining self-confidence is more important than accumulating knowledge. The reasoning behind is that students should not be measured by scores but be considered as many possibilities of human being with self-confidence.
To begin with, teachers should help students to grow their self-confidence because it enables them to have a will to challenge something. To be specific, there might be huge differences between a student who were forced to study all the time and a student who were encouraged to gain self-confidence when they encounter a big life changing chances in their lives. For instance, when it comes to deciding a future job, the student who only knows about study might be reluctant to get special job, like “ a youtube creater”, more specifically they might have limited view of occupation. On the other hand, the students who have self-confidence will choose their job whatever they want with confident.
Secondly, some people still think that students must study. I can confidently argue that self-confidence must affect students who study hard in a positive way. To be more specific, self-confident will make students study harder, it motivates them to study. For example, I was a very introvert student, when I was in high school but I liked learning something. My teacher encouraged me to participate in academic contests and I could win the best prize in that competition. I would have never imagined to attempt a contest, unless my teacher tried to do me so. So, I could put this prize on my résumé and enter a prestigious university.
To conclude, teacher should not only teach academic skills and knowledge but also encourage and motivate students to challenge and give courage to confront every situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ; the best
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...nce must affect students who study hard in a positive way. To be more specific, self-confident wi...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'imagined attempting'.
Suggestion: imagined attempting
...in that competition. I would have never imagined to attempt a contest, unless my teacher tried to d...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...umé and enter a prestigious university. To conclude, teacher should not only tea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14201183432 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15330351583 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547337278107 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9058732752 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.866666667 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382038571478 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119201874637 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075225788354 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209897766163 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692335861637 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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