Moving to a new city or country is not a good idea because you will lose your old friends.
Some people might think that moving to other cities or countries is not favorable because there is possibility that we could lose our old friends. However, I firmly disagree with this idea for several reasons. The reasoning behind is that we can keep contact with our old friends regardless of how far we live and that we could experience many new things by leaving the familiar area.
To begin with, we live in such a high technology era. It is so old fashioned and conservative notion that we would lose our friends because of moving to other areas. We can easily contact our surroundings via Internet, cell phone, no matter how far we go. These developed devices enable us to make calls, check on what they are doing constantly in real time. For instance, when I was young, I left my old city to go to university. So, I left all of my secondary school friends in hometown. However, I kept calling and texting them while attending university. Moreover, I always checked what my friends were doing via Instagram, or face book by looking up their posts.
Secondly, leaving the area where we used to be is a great idea in that we could experience a lot of new things. To be more specific, we could make new friends in a different place with sharing thoughts and ideas. This will expand the way we see the world and grow one step further, which will help us adapt to a society. For example, I had to leave my town to go to the university, so people I met in that time were so unfamiliar that I should make courage to talk to these strangers since I was introvert. Therefore, I decided to put myself in an inevitable situation that I must speak someone so, I joined a movie club to make new friends. Eventually, I could get along with various people by sharing our opinions and backgrounds of the movie after watching it. This experience improved my social and communication skill.
In conclusion, it is nonsense to think that if we move to other regions, we lose our best friends. We could hold our precious relationships with the help of advanced technological devices. To build on that we could earn precious experiences which will be invaluable asset for the future through moving to new areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... face book by looking up their posts. Secondly, leaving the area where we used...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6192893401 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65091894035 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53807106599 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4636922695 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6666666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7619047619 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176709922328 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560769689971 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761609618922 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126697346677 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545044130151 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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