It is widely accepted that nowadays human beings owe a lot to technological advances. One of the most important and useful advances are movies and television. Some people may hold the view that these advanced technologies which appears in the form on television and movies negatively effects on young people's behavior. Some other, nonetheless, take an opposite point and believe that its positive effects are much more than negative ones. Personally, I have a penchant toward the latter. In the next two paragraphs I will aptly delve into my reasons and I will cogently substantiate my perspective.
The first aspect to point out is that most of the people can learn so many things about good behavior and cultural things of other countries by watching helpful programs on television. If someone does not have the opportunity to experience different things by going to the other countries, one can learn it by watching documentaries about their behaviors and relationships with each other. My own experience is a good example in this notion. Two years ago I had no idea about United States so I had started to watch so many documentaries about the couple of good behaviors of American people; therefore, after immigration to United States I knew so many things about it even I have not been there for whole my life. Had not been able to watch movies, young people would have not any Idea about other good behavior of other people all over the world without traveling there.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance is that movies most of the companies allocating billions of dollars of budget to do advertising in the television shows which can benefit them a lot. For example, the advertisement can be about health programs so people would pay more attention to their health and it would trigger them to go to monthly check up and buy hygiene stuff. They way that young people behave, and the advertisement is a vicious circle, if they face more useful advertisements, they would more be under effect of it to behave positively.
Finally, yet importantly, another reason why I agree with this statement is the indisputable fact that there are a lot of movies which shows narratives about the life of famous scientist and entrepreneurs. Young people can choose one of these characters as a role model and imitate his good behaviors. By watching movies people not only can find their favorable role model but also, they can follow them in different shows. In fact, this is a win-win game whether people follow their role model in television or go to find them and talk to them in person which is much more difficult.
To recapitulate, based on the aforementioned argues, one person can logically draw the conclusion that television and movies can benefit him in many ways, from knowing about different cultures to advertisement notifications; actually, there are other reasons and examples elaborating this idea which are not mentioned above due to the dearth of time. If one weighs the merits and demerits of the above statement, one soon realizes that major upheaval in technology happens and we have to use to it so we should use it in a positive way.
It is widely accepted that nowadays human beings owe a lot to technological advances. One of the most important and useful advances are movies and television. Some people may hold the view that these advanced technologies which appears in the form on television and movies negatively effects on young people's behavior. Some other, nonetheless, take an opposite point and believe that its positive effects are much more than negative ones. Personally, I have a penchant toward the latter. In the next two paragraphs I will aptly delve into my reasons and I will cogently substantiate my perspective.
The first aspect to point out is that most of the people can learn so many things about good behavior and cultural things of other countries by watching helpful programs on television. If someone does not have the opportunity to experience different things by going to the other countries, one can learn it by watching documentaries about their behaviors and relationships with each other. My own experience is a good example in this notion. Two years ago I had no idea about United States so I had started to watch so many documentaries about the couple of good behaviors of American people; therefore, after immigration to United States I knew so many things about it even I have not been there for whole my life. Had not been able to watch movies, young people would have not any Idea about other good behavior of other people all over the world without traveling there.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance is that movies most of the companies allocating billions of dollars of budget to do advertising in the television shows which can benefit them a lot. For example, the advertisement can be about health programs so people would pay more attention to their health and it would trigger them to go to monthly check up and buy hygiene stuff. They way that young people behave, and the advertisement is a vicious circle, if they face more useful advertisements, they would more be under effect of it to behave positively.
Finally, yet importantly, another reason why I agree with this statement is the indisputable fact that there are a lot of movies which shows narratives about the life of famous scientist and entrepreneurs. Young people can choose one of these characters as a role model and imitate his good behaviors. By watching movies people not only can find their favorable role model but also, they can follow them in different shows. In fact, this is a win-win game whether people follow their role model in television or go to find them and talk to them in person which is much more difficult.
To recapitulate, based on the aforementioned argues, one person can logically draw the conclusion that television and movies can benefit him in many ways, from knowing about different cultures to advertisement notifications; actually, there are other reasons and examples elaborating this idea which are not mentioned above due to the dearth of time. If one weighs the merits and demerits of the above statement, one soon realizes that major upheaval in technology happens and we have to use to it so we should use it in a positive way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 518, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e have to use to it so we should use it in a positive way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2642.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91078066914 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8184690972 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481412639405 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 856.8 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.452398166 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.1 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25825836229 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096090788255 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139175861792 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16408354717 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169220002158 0.0645574589148 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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