TPO46
The reading claims that in the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms and storing patients medical records in electronic records has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. However, the lecturer finds all the ideas questionable and presents some evidence to refute them all.
The author argues that it can reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. This costs much less than copying, faxing and others from one location to another. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that most of the doctors who adapt to new electronic records keep the paper as a backup and so they pay extra money for their own storage of paper.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that the electrical records can aid research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records.it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because they are already formatted for data collection. On the contrary, the professor underlines the fact that it does not necessarily benefit them, it is sometimes difficult to access to data because there in the united states who want to collect data have to obtain many permissions because of their strict privacy laws and some of the patients can block their users for so many reasons such as self-drug usage.
Finally, the reading asserts that it can illegible handwritings improper transcripts of data. In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that it cannot eliminate errors because most doctors who are using the electrical records still use pen and other stuff when wanting to examination patients.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ecause of their strict privacy laws and some of the patients can block their users for so m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, still, in contrast, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20788530466 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63219617922 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605734767025 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.6656449499 49.2860985944 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.444444444 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 21.698381199 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5555555556 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.563761370896 0.272083759551 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198451955156 0.0996497079465 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173422015188 0.0662205650399 262% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314879617623 0.162205337803 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136178100772 0.0443174109184 307% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.3589403974 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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