Violating act is an unacceptable case. People who do the violence toward others can not be justified for any reason. The rate of this obscene act has been escalated among youth, and, great number of people considers this grows the result of increased violence scene in television and movies. In my opinion, seeing this gratuitous violence scene has two unfortunate result. First, it breaks the taboo of this kind of acts, and second, teach them how to do an act of violence.
The most important worry of the media magnates is not the effect of what the media portray. They are just thinking about the revenue of it. Nowadays we witness some harsh and furious scenes in the movies every day. I believe seeing something repeatedly make it routine, even though, it is a violence scene. presenting harsh acts in movies in considerable amount breaks the taboo of it, especially for young people. Some of these kinds of movies have age limits for viewers, but it is impossible to make sure that just the target population will watch it.
On the other hand, people who expose to these scenes are more likely to learn how to do it or get the motivation and confidence. Obviously, when someone sees something, his or her brain memorize and learn from it. Consider a situation that a youth witness racial violence in television, unconsciously he or she learns that it may be ok to have racial opinions, on the other hand, he learns the way he can act toward other races. Another reason why I advocate the attitude of this opinion is the way that this scene may affect the youth's mind. It may make them unsympathetic and nervous.
From what have discussed above, we can finally draw a conclusion that says, it is governments duty to ban or reduce the violent scenes from the movies, In a matter to reduce the effect of them on peoples especially the youths.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Presenting
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Suggestion:
... them on peoples especially the youths.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69325153374 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52928945161 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546012269939 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.052823451 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166575149312 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471269173246 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393668289456 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989909677323 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245509036523 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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