Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes. On the other hand, some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities. If the opening of a large shopping center in your neighborhood were announced, would you support or oppose its construction? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Large shopping centers are one of the most impressive urban attractions in our new metropolises. however, there is an active controversy over whether we should allow that they are built in local neighborhood or not. they, like a double-edged sword have both pros and cons. however, I personally subscribe to the view that their demerits are more than their merits for the local people. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To begin with, although the great shopping buildings near houses could bring an array of merits, its drawbacks outweigh its benefits. people usually need to have a peaceful life in a residential place. By constructing a very vast shopping area near residential districts, many other phenomena such as parking lots, amusement parks and hotels will appear abruptly. this, unfortunately, leads to create an overpopulated area near the houses, which is not desirable at all. To give a more vivid picture, I would like to recount a personal story. Ten years ago, I dwelled with my family in suburb of a metropolis in our country, named Isfahan. The mayor decided to enhance the popular attraction and life quality of the district by adding some modern lofty building. Not many months past, the population who circulate in evening in the district increased to threefold. our green and calm neighborhood changed to a very crowded dwelling which was always noisy and messy. we leaved our house only two months after the construction. this example clearly demonstrate that the new massive construction could easily damage the local residents' lives.
In another point of view, each parish has some small local businesses. Stablishing new massive shopping areas can hardly damage their work and face them with economic hardship. In our modern complex society, people naturally prefer to go to the great malls and supermarkets simply because they are much more attractive. With their great attractive big shops and colorful storefronts they can easily drag all the customers’' eyes towards their excellence. In such situation no one even think again to go shopping to the small craftsmen's shops and local minimarkets. As an in-depth research conducted in developing countries demonstrated, a hefty of the local businesses perish due to the appearance of the big splendid malls in local neighborhoods in these countries.
Drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, constructing big shopping areas has more disadvantages than advantages. because not only does it lead to overpopulation in private residential places, but also it can damage all the little markets and local businesses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31894484412 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95257696318 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606714628297 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3698986114 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4166666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54166666667 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197264503855 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486249656348 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451183909223 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11130494119 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035874007658 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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